»Trapped (A MineCraft Story)

Rolled out Chapter 6 Would appreciate ideas and suggestions

 

Update:
1) Chapter 7 released.
2) Graphics Introduced.

 

Update:
1) Chapter 8 & 9 released.

 

Wow great story, tbh this was pretty damn good in words of Viva please even more!!!!

 

Thank You, I'll try

 

Wow, it's rare to have such great story.

Starting with criticism:
1) Graphic could have been better with resource pack (unless you intend it to be original) And higher minecraft video setting (chunk render etc.) But nonetheless very good.
2) The first chapter - it's been one month, yet you don't know how to punch a tree and build a house? How do you find lava? This is a bit of a cliche. (And you say instinctual later, which is even more terrible)Now I read again it's good

The good side:
1) Gripping story, someone who never played minecraft will really treat this as a novel. I personally think so.
2) Interaction with environment creates a vision in reader's mind, even without graphics.
3) Dialogs with villager brings a new level to the story, points added!

Originality: 5/10 - Based on minecraft
Plot: 7/10 - The cliche reduced your marks here
Expression: 9.5/10 - Great use of creative and descriptive writing!
Langauge: 10/10 - No comments here.

Overall awesome writing and story haha!

Note: If only Minecraft Story Mode uses this story....... XDDD

Edit: PLot - 8.5/10 - No more cliche XD I'm sorry

 

Sorry for the poor graphics haha I am bad with those and yea I do have lower settings to reduce lags since my computer is quite old xD Regarding the point on one month ago, I fear you may have misunderstood the introduction. It's a flashback, meaning when he punched the tree for the first time, it was only his second day in the world (The first day being the one when he saw the zombie) The Lava part occurred before he even had the flashback. Kinda confusing to explain, but I adopted a flashback-style approach to the story =)

Thanks for the feedback =) I'll try to work around the originality and the plot. Though rest assured, something new is coming out in the upcoming chapters. Not going to stray too far away from the minecraft universe, but there will be the introduction of certain ideas for originality. Hoping for Chapter 10 to be released today. Feel free to share more suggestions! Cheers! =)

 

Very cool! I'm looking forward for more.
You just messed up my brain more lol. I'll read again and see.

Edit: Okay I did misread. Ops.

 

Update:
1) Chapter 10 released (Happy digesting)

As usual, welcoming comments, preferably mentioning both good and bad sides of the story

 

the twist when we learn the librarian was in charge... soo many questions i luv it continue!!

 

Thank You

@TheCatsKing Would like to know why Chapters 1-4 weren't rated as creative

 

I read the whole thing......BRILLIANT

-yash

 

Thank You Any suggestions or areas you find lacking in the story?

 

AMAZING!!!!!

Love the story very well done

 

Thank You Hoping to roll out Chapter 11 today or tomorrow

 

Yes plz!!!!!!

 

Yes plz!!!!!!

 

Read the 1st chapter and it got me hooked.
How long does it take to write 1 chapter ???

 

Well, chapters 1 - 6 were relatively fast to write. Probably taking 30 minutes - 1 hour and the entire chapter is complete. Subsequent chapters are taking longer, as more is required to keep the story engaging with ideas while at the same time, ensuring all the loose ends are tied up. I will not publish chapters which introduce too many questions that I myself will not have an answer to. So yea, the upcoming chapters will be taking some time =)

 

As I look back on this thread, I thought it's a pity to let it die. The story deserves a ending, at least that's what I think it should be. If there's anyone interested, I'm intending to work with a partner to continue on this story. I'm going to be rather busy, so I would appreciate help on the generation of ideas, storyline etc. More details will be given if there are people interested in this collaboration. Kinda old of a thread, but sorry to the few who have been waiting for the Chapter 11.